The Eyes of Death
Bent to broken and back again
I am not afraid
Of Death, who's hair comes tumbling down
In a black cascade
Stretched to snapped and back again
My fears rest not in you
But far away from us and home
And all that I love, too.
Death cackles loud and cruel
Her voice harder than steel
And run away, I do not
For fear's not what I feel.
Death's eyes grow bigger as she nears
But I do not back away
And now, I think, It's me she fears.
I will not die today.
I stare at Death with her threatening eyes
And threaten her with my own
And pretty soon Death is gone
For I've turned her to stone.
Credits: Bethany DeWitt (aka Owl City, from Morgan.ponybox.com)
Story behind why she wrote it:
On this one, my parents said if I wanted a certain, amazing jumping horse, I had to sell my first pony, Bailey. Bailey is reaaallly old and can't be ridden anymore. I had to decide between my Bailey girl, or the new, fabulous jumper. I picked Bailey. A "friend" of mine bought the jumper instead. The jumper ended up having problems, so I wrote this poem.
Two roads,
So much to lose.
A rose on each,
Which will i choose?
Like the rest of the path,
On the left the rose is dead.
But on the right it's all alive
And the rose a startling red.
Frightened by the colors,
I quickly turn away
And I go down the path that's dead
Taking in the sad decay.
As I near the end i see a light
Shining through the trees.
I follow it, warm and bright,
Against the dying leaves.
Though i am scratched
By briars and thorns,
It's only my skin
And my clothes that are torn.
I reach a meadow
And sigh at the sight,
I'm glad i went left
Instead of going right.
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Credits: Bethany DeWitt
Stop and stare
You do not know
The burden she bears
So please just go
Let her cry
Let her fall apart
She won't be shy
About her broken heart
She's too far gone
So please let her be
Just let her drown
In her own misery
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Iran Conta Affair OF 1980's - Written By: Kylee T (aka: Hollywood Establos, from Morgan.ponybox.com)
November 1986, the Iran Contra Scandal came to light. Colonel North, Rear Adm. John M. Poindexter as well as two arm dealer’s where convicted and found guilty of defrauding the United States Of America by selling weapons to Iran and then funneling the money to Nicaraguan rebels. Reagan, who testified at the trial told The New York Times, ''I just have to believe that they're going to be found innocent because I don't think they were guilty of any lawbreaking or any crime’’ (Julie Johnson,” Reagan Asserts Iran-Contra Defendants Are Not Guilty”) However the underlying cause seemed to be the fact that congress no longer wished to continue funding with valid reasons yet Reagan and those involved in the scandals thought it wrong to turn down support. Although some things seemed to not be clear as to whether or not Reagan was involved with what some call the biggest scandal since Water Gate.
Economically this was a big deal, both for the United States and Nicaragua. With congress ending funding it can cause a major affect on trading among other things. This is not just because it was a possibility to ruin relationships but also because there was a question of how the money was being spent and if we continued to support the contras. According to Gates, “The Contras, even with American Support, cannot overthrow the Sandinista regime.” (“Nicaragua”, Robert M. Gates) However, in several paragraphs after he then contradicts himself, “Failure of the United States to provide further assistance to the resistance and collapse of the contra movement...thereby reversing the progress made in recent months.” Amb. Kirkpatrick believed that “If we don't find the money to support the contras, it will be perceived in the region and world as our having abandoned them.”(“National Security Planning Group Meeting”) That comment holds some truth. If we didn’t find the money with the economy then politically we would be seen as those who abandon others in a time of need.
We already have a poor relation with Cuba; however it seemed if we left Nicaragua now we would have a second Cuba. Gates refers to a quote by George Santayana, “Those who forget the past are condemned to repeat it.” According to gates, “In 1958-60 we thought that we could reach some sort of accommodation with Castro that would encourage him to build a pluralistic government in Cuba. We have been doing the same thing with the Nicaraguans, with the same success.” Now, anyone who ever cared to pay attention would know that the U.S. tried to help Cuba and to help stop communism and now Americans are no longer allowed in the country. When you look closely it seems to be all too familiar. I think that in Congress eyes they were afraid to repeat the past. Cuba was a threat because of the ability to shoot missiles at us at a close ranger, now look at the location of Nicaragua, just as big a threat from a few hundred more miles. The position with Central America, the western hemisphere, which has a major impact on the U.S., could have been majorly affected by a takeover of Central America.
If you look at the political aspect, there is no winning. If we used air strikes to remove military forces we would only be showing the world that the U.S. did not wish to neither invade nor help the cause. “Unless the acceleration of adverse military, political and economic developments is reversed, the Khomeini regime will face serious inability. This condition will sap officials energies and government resources...” (National Security Decision Directive) In a way, it is possible to understand why those involved would want to go around congress in a fear of the domino affect. If one country falls then the next one does and so on.
While today we do not have government officials defying congress and funneling money to the contras there is still conflict in the Middle East, a war some fear loosing . It is this fear that pushed us forward to become involved when terrorists hijacked several planes and crashed them into the twin towers. This fear has put us into an ongoing war that started in the 90’s and is in the light more than ever. As we fought the war against communism we now fight the war on terrorism. Just as when the soviet union collapsed, it was a huge victory for the U.S. when Osama Bin Ladin was taken out on operation Neptune Spear. While it could be said that the lesson learned is to never make a deal with the enemy, I believe we learned that when we sided with the Afghans to fight the soviets. The CIA began operation Cyclone including Osama Bin Ladin. Fast forward to ten years ago and we are in a war against them. Turns out it was like making a deal with the devil just like it was for those involved in the Iran Contra Scandal.
Resources used:
Times, Julie Johnson, Special To The New York. "Reagan Asserts Iran-Contra Defendants Are Not Guilty." The New York Times. 26 Mar. 1988. The New York Times. 18 May 2012 .
United States. White House. National Security. National Security Decision Directive. K. Johnson, 1988. Print.
United States. CIA. Director/Deputy. Nicaragua. By Robert M. Gates. Robert M. Gates, 1984. Print.
United States. U.S. Goverment. White House. National Security Planning Group Meeting. By The President, Vice PResident, Dr. Fred Ikle, Amb. Joane J. Kirkpatrick, and Robert C. McRarlane. National Security Council, 1984. Print.
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Written and owned by Celia Nickelsen ~ Find her on: http://21gunsart.deviantart.com/
A Little Thing I've Learnt In Life
Now, this is coming from someone who rarely sees praise.
Every high exam result is not 'Well done, you got 90%' but 'Well what about the remaining 10%, you made too many careless mistakes.'
Everything I do, in my life, is criticised, wether I like it or not, by my family.
Everywhere you go, you will have your critics.
No matter what you do, you will never be the best, there will always be 'someone' better than you, even if that 'someone' is a made up image of perfection in the back of your mind.
That 'someone' is the person you have to try and aim to be better than.
I have lots of 'someones'.
Those 'someones' will always be there with me, reminding me that no matter if I am the best in the world at something, 'someone' will be better, and there is always room to improve on 'perfection'
A person who can see their 'someones' is someone I can admire.
A person who can see their 'someones' and accept that those 'someones' will always be there, and they will always have to outdo those 'someones' is a person I can look up to.
In life, you'll have personality clashes, you'll have haters. You'll have those who break your heart and those who's hearts you break.
You'll have 'someones', those people you want to be like, and sometimes they always seem to be better than you are.
Don't get jealous of those 'someones'.
Instead, put your head down and work harder.
When I ride, I ride with the aim to improve so I can show those 'someones' that they're wrong.
It hasn't happened yet, and my 'someones' in my head that are forever talking about how their leg is always on and their heels are always down and thumbs are always up will one day be shown through my determination that they're wrong.
You'll meet 'someones' everywhere you go in life.
Some you'll admire, some you won't.
The aim is never to be like those 'someones', but to be better than them.
It just might take a lot of time, patience and practice, and then maybe one day, you'll be a 'someone' to somebody.
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Comment from Madeirey -
From: Madeirey
From ID: 221939
Time Sent: 01Jun12 00:41 AM
Title: Hey There!
Hello! You have never heard of me but I saw you in the "Creative Writing" group so I snooped around on your profile. WOW! I absolutely love how you write so much. *is jealous* I am a large fan of writing. Although currently I am a bit stuck in one. It is quite horrible staring at the same word for a hour wondering what to put that isn't dull and lifeless...
From: Madeirey
From ID: 221939
Time Sent: 02Jun12 14:48 PM
Title: Sadness
I love how you put so much emotion your writing. It seems so REAL and allows the reader to know how you are feeling inside... If that is happy, sad, or anything really. A powerful tool, that is.
(I told her I had a new record of: 36 veiws on my site, here's her response...)
From: Madeirey
From ID: 221939
Time Sent: 04Jun12 00:51 AM
Title: :D
That's awesome!! Half of them might have been me... I have been stalking. xD LOL! Love the Sword Wars story... I'm addicted. xD
Comment from Tearlily-
From: TearLily
From ID: 52359
Time Sent: 07Jun12 01:49 AM
Title: Hi
Hi there I was reading your home page and that's so neat. Isn't the show that you watched that gave you the hologram idea a Disney movie about that one chick who sings and dances and such?
Comment from Pony Meadows-
From: Pony Meadows
From ID: 37448
Time Sent: 03Jul12 23:46 PM
Title: Hey
I was wondering if you would want to do a message RP with me?
And BTW - I can't WAIT to read more of Flight of a New Era!! I started reading it before when you posted it on the forums and I was so upset when I found out you were only going to write it in October, but now that you're starting in August i'm so excited! You're such a great write. And to be honest I normally don't like your genre of writing, but when it's written by you it's AMAZING!!
Don't Erase Me ~ Written By: Miya/Eurlo/Brandy on 10/03/2012
Erase my past...
Erase my troubles...
But please don't consider me trash...
I am starting new...
Starting fresh...
So please let these thoughts brew...
I'm not her...
'Cause this is me
She was a trouble maker...
Unlike her, I won't make a big scene...
Nor will I annoy people like she did...
So please don't let me feel like I'm unseen...
You can erase my past...
But please don't erase me...
My thank you to Vocaloid ~ Written On 8/31/12 By: Miya/Eurlo/Brandy
I would like to PERSONALLY THANK Vocaloid, because they inspired a now favorite story of mine I'm writing called: Life Projections...about a holographic teen living a normal teenage life.
This anniversary has me in tears over pure happiness, WITHOUT you Life Projection would never be written...
SO THANKS from the bottom of my heart!!
XOXOXOXO
We are strong, you just have to believe despite what everyone says ~ Written On 8/29/12 By: Miya/Eurlo/Brandy
Who said you’re weak?
Who said you’re ugly?
Who said you’re fat?
I say you’re a STRONG individual!!
I say you’re a BEAUTIFUL person!!
I say you are whatever you believe you WANT TO BE!!
Don’t take their crap!!
Smack it all on a wall and tape it there, leave it there to remind you, THAT YOU CAN BE THE OPPOSITE OF IT ALL!!
Then smile at the progress you have made, because it takes GUTS to STAND STRONG IN THE FACE OF EVIL!!
Turn me down, I don't care... ~ Written On 8/23/12 By: Miya/Eurlo/Brandy
Turn me down, I don't care...
Leave me here scarred and fighting for air...
Make-up running from my eyes, as I look to the skies...
If you leave me, I'll be fine...
I'll be left crying, but I will still shine...
You can not bring me down...
So leave me...
Turn me down, I don't care...
I will stand again soon...
Just as I'm illuminated every night by the moon...
Warmth To My Heart ~ Written On 7/5/12 By: Miya/Eurlo/Brandy
Writing and watching the story come to life in my very own mind. As my fingers pound away at the keys before them. That pleasurable clicking noise they make as sentences are then turned to paragraphs and soon a whole story. I can't quite describe the feeling...it's like a flame being lit within my heart, the warmth it brings can not even be bested by a fire from my own living room fireplace...This is the THRILLS and SATISFACTION of a writer's job!! THIS SENSE OF LIFE WE AS WRITERS CREATE!!
Self Torture ~ Written on 7/6/12 By: Miya/Eurlo/Brandy
Why do we FALL for someone, then when they're gone we SEEK OUT songs and poems that REMIND US of that person? Why when we are already MOURNING the lost relationship do we CAUSE ourselves MORE PAIN? Is it so we GROW stiff to the PAIN? OR maybe to be TORN APART worse so that we may HEAL ourselves? I know the pain, the feeling of loneliness...
Self Torture may be so we learn to cope and maybe we will be stronger next time...No one knows for sure, but maybe that's a bit of comfort to those who ask, "Why?" STAY STRONG, being strong is not NEVER crying, but to heal and learn from those tears...
Blasting Away The Tears ~ Written on 7/6/12 By: Miya/Eurlo/Brandy
You turn up that one song he gave you and you fall against the wall and sink to the floor in tears, makeup running, your face is now streaked with blackness...You cry so hard, you think the music will drown you out...but all it's doing is drowning you in more pain and sarrow...You miss him and think about all those things you did together, the late nights, movies, sneeking around the house...The smiles and laughter...But now it's all gone and you can't help but remember it all so vividly...You sit there wondering if he's doing the same or hanging with his friends as if none of it ever happened...You try so hard to blast the tears away and fall asleep in the floor with teary stained eyes...
LOVE YOURSELF and friends should support you - Written on 5/6/12 by: Miya
We Are All UNIQUE!!
I love writing and RPGing...I spend 70+ of my day online and my family hates it...BUT I LOVE WHAT I DO!! I write and RPG. If I'm writing anythng ber it a random muse, RPG plot for me and a partner, story or a book...I AM HAPPY!! I WOULD DIE if anything happened to my laptop...Just the other day my laptop had a glitch and said reinstall Work word proccessor..I flipped out...shut it down and restarted my laptop...and it worked just fine and everything was still there(thank god) I then prceeded to CRY...I was so scared and relieved!! DON'T hate me cause I'm a internet junkie...support me, cuase it's where my dreams are at...
Leaving your past behind - Written on 4/9/12 by: Miya
I close my eyes for the night and in th morning light, I shall have no fear, nor shall I weep a tear.
My past is behind me and my future ahead, the girl I once was is now dead...No longer do I live scared, for I have friends who had an ear to spare.
I am moving on, for the path of God has been shone...
Accomplishment - Written 4/12/12 by: Miya
A tear falls slowly to the ground as she is overwelmed with joy. She is leaving a site she joined for friends years ago, and now she wants to chase her dreams as a writer. So many memories and friends are here...joy and sadness mix inside her. She finally has decided to chase that dream one step closer and become a full time writer.
Haters and misery tied into one -
I was alone,sure i would make trouble to get attention...
Did any of you think of why I was doing it? No...
Did any of you ask? No...
Therefore none of you even cared, you would all be rude, down right hateful, inside my soul was already so weak adn you would all tear it to even smaller pieces...
I was so alone, so weak, being tore down with each bit of hope I seemed to gain....
I grew to hate alot of you, and fearing you as well, but no longer, do I fear you, I dare you to do it again... you will not like my reply.... that weak child is gone, never to return...
So go be mean, but if I find out about anyone doing it to someone else I know or don't, you will hear a few things from me...
Concerning Self Esteem-
Well you are unique, and you have to believe you are regardless of what people say:( I thought I was ugly, but came to terms beauty isn't everything) That's my way of looking at it, I am me, I love to write, I'm smart, got my GED(general education Diploma)...
So I don't really care, I'll try my best to look good, but not going out of my way to impress anyone, because as my quot concerning beauty goes, "Beauty isn't everything, heart and soul is." Meaning if you believe you are, that's all that matters and a great personality helps.
Untitled-
...And she sits here, a handful of hair tightly grasped in her hand as tears puddle in her eyes and fall to the ground. A sense of life has been stirred and she is reminded by everything in life who helped her get this far. Her tears are of joy and pain from her past. She weeps not of sadness, for she is finally on the right track in life. She may have a long road ahead of her filled with pain and trouble, but she knows she has support every step of the way and refuses to back down.
(This is just the way I feel day to day.)
A Writer that cries out to be an Artist as well-
She sees all the beautiful creations made and tries/fails everytime to make something. Yet comes out with nothing. Her heart cries, for it wants that talent so bad. But it's just out of reach, and though she holds her arm out for it, it only gets further away.
The pain of a writer is that she can never give her characters the life they are always asking her for.
There's an editor in every person-
(With the proper credits to the quotes I used in the passage below. I do not claim the quotes!!)
They say every person judges his/herself in everything he/she does. This is very true for all writers, we are probably some of the worst. We are scared to write new things do to lack of experience or knowledge. But once we do our writing skill increases and we become more potent writers. No writer can ever stop improving, rather it be grammar, spelling, genre exploring, different perspectives on the story at hand, or just writing in general.
We all have an inner editor in us, some of us use it, while others see no need in it. Wise words I once heard, "Never stop trying to improve." That and the saying, "Never give up on something that you can't go a day without thinking about." by - Unknown. both mean alot to be and I often look at them when I feel down with my writing. Or my newest favorite quote, "Keep on going, and the chances are that you will stumble on something, perhaps when you are least expecting it. I never heard of anyone ever stumbling on something sitting down." by - Charles F. Kettering. My point is to never give up if you love writing, ALL writer's struggle just like you are now! which brings me to yet another great quote, "Nothing in this world can take the place of persistence. Talent will not nothing is more common than unsuccessful people with talent. Genius will not unrewarded genius is almost a proverb. Education will not the world is full of educated derelicts. Persistence and determination alone are omnipotent. The slogan 'press on' has solved and always will solve the problems of the human race." by - Calvin Coolidge
When I had lost everything, even my Faith... - Written by: Miya/Eurlo on Friday, March 30, 2012 at 1:00pm
A few years ago I plunged into the dark hole of seclusion, I became depressed, thought no one cared about me. I had of course prayed several times for help. They seem to go unanswered...many nights would I cry myself to sleep, the pain of my depression cuased me to lose my Faith. I soon begun to think suicidal thoughts, even put knives to my wrist and ropes around my neck....I knew what I was dong would solve nothing. I would put them away and go cry till my pillow became soaked with tears, sometimes even falling alseep. I went many years fearing people and the outside world, fearing what judgement they would bring. I went downhill, death wishes became a daily thing. Years later I discovered online friends that I fit in with a few I still have 3-4 years later. I found love, only to lose it to arguements between the two of us. The relationship seemed to have wake me up to the world. I have now beat depression back in november of 2011, and finished my first short story, I have lost weight, I feel alive!! I am currently searching for a jobb and trying to fit into the world once again! My Faith has been restored, life rediscovered, acommplishments made....
All thanks to one guy which seems to have COMPLETELY turned my life around. So to him I say for the millionth time, THANK YOU!
Depression, after effects and Love ~ Written By: Miya/Eurlo on Saturday, December 31, 2011 at 12:28am
Depression took me over at such a young age, my life slowly fell apart, I gave up making friends and never talked to any guy for the whole time I was depressed....
I started eating emotionally, I quickly gained weight...
I quit taking care of myself, let myself go...
I lost my self esteem like a flame to a candle being blown out...
I was done for, I quit caring if I lived, because the pain was so deep, death seemed like a good answer....
I often tried to kill myself, grabbing nives and holding them at my wrist, grabing belts looking up at th ceiling above me.... wanting to beat my head till I bled to death
I often hit myself till I bruised myself, didn't ever care if I got a cut or wounded...I would sit there and marvel at the blood coming out often trying to make it bleed more by picking at it so it wouldn't clot...
If it were not for my friends, I would have cut my wrist, or ended up hanging from the ceiling.... I am cover in scars from my picking habit.....
I am mentally scarred as well, I still have self esteem issues, still fat, but I have beaten depression, yet the results of it still lingers....
It will take alot of kind words and a loving heart to mend me completly, because I am still suffering the after effects....
So love me with all your being, speak kind words into my ear, love me for who I am, and not hate me for what I have become...
Only time will tell how much you really love me, because if you truely love me...
You will love me regardless of my looks, you would not be afraid to be seen with me around your friends, you would not ever leave me for a prettier girl, who has a skinnnier look and prettier face....
To me that is true love, that is what love is all about....
So tell me do you have what it takes to mend a broken soul? Could you love me for who I am right now, would I have to change to suit your taste in a girl?
Don't leave me in the dark, because to me, you are my light, I have began my healing thanks to you, I'm hoping you'll be the one to heal me completely....
Living in two worlds -
Just a year ago I lived in one world.
The next year came around and then all of a sudden I lived in two.
Both worlds had trees,grass.
Both had animals.
Only one had magic....
Only one had wolves....
Only one, I imagined....
I made my way in both worlds....
I made mistakes in both worlds....
I made only one up....
How did I walk it in both worlds at the same time?
How did I imagine only one?
Here's how:
I lived in one and the other I also lived in.
Only one I lived in a made up world....
So that is how I live in two worlds!
Can you guess what my other world is?
Knight in shining armor(to a dear friend of mine) -
Since you met me here you have made my life change for the best.
I have noticed I'm not as depressed, I'm not alone, there is someone out there who I get along great with...
Since you've been around life has been a blast, I haven't laughed this much in a long time with someone....
I seem to not be as weak any more, for you have strengthed my heart and mind once again...
I couldn't have met a better person than you, always know...YOU changed my life, YOU made me happy, YOU made me strong again...
No one else I have met here has made me that way, even though they are great YOU are my knight in shining armor...
So to the person who saved me from sure destruction, I give him my gratitude...
THANK YOU, for all you have done to me you are my everything:)
maybe know things will be cleared of the thick fog which surronds me and I will finally see, whati have been missing for all these years...
~Love Miya, the soul that was lost has been found again....
Knight in shining armor (message to a friend I respect) -
You are a geat person, a even better friend, an amazing Father.
You know how to treat people with respect and care, you know when to listen and when to shut your mouth...
You can be a goof and yet I have seen the more serious side of you as well...
I feel like without you life is like a puzzle, where YOUR the missing piece...
I like to chat for hours with you, and make you laugh....
I like that you can make me laugh and even on my worst days I can not get mad at you, it's impossible...
We are so close I feel as if I have known you a lifetime...
We work great as a support team and we are there for one another when we need a should to cry on(not literally in this case) or a ear for listening...
We are basically like links on a chain, forever togther ...
Love is irresistable(message to my dear friend) -
I feel like I'm torn to a million pieces, you have opened my heart and now I feel the heartache when your gone...
I love you so much that all I can think about is you, day and night....
I spend days daydreaming and nights crying....
I want to be with you sooo bad the pain has become unbearable....
I have had breakdowns since we met....
My heart begins to race and it feels as if it will explode, the blood rushing through my body, I begin to tremble....
I Wish you was here just to hold me, I owe alot to you for giving me that final push out of depression, and now I don't wanna lose you!!
I love you so much more than just you being a hero...
I don't know if you feel the same way but my heart aches for YOU....
Seeing Life differently (message to my dear friend) -
Rather we see life in black and white or we see it in color, life is the same either way...
Maybe the fun is taken out of seeing the worlds colors, but it is not needed to live a normal life...
It isn't only about what we see, it's about what we feel, we taste, we hear...
There are people all over the world born without sight yet some are born like you with site but it's screwed up, those who put you down because of it are nothing but rude, mean people who like the feeling of others pain, do I judge you? No, and I never will, if anything you have a gift some of us wished we had, some of us wonder what life would be like to see things in a different way, but true none of us would want to be that way forever, no one wants less than they have, but everyone wants more...
I wished I could help you, but we are who god made us to be, and the saying goes, "There's someone out there for everyone to love." maybe you have finally found yours...
we are all special in our own ways...
NEW CONTENT AS OF: 6/3/12 @ 2PM
2012-03-30 08:51:52
Songs That Have Meaning...
Written by: Miya
Why do you listen to songs?
Perhaps because it was recommended by a friend?
Maybe you listen to it because everyone else does?
Or maybe due to religous beliefs?
Well I listen to music for what MEANING a song has in the lyrics.
I find a song is better and inspires if it has a message it is trying to get out to the world. It is the way I search for songs now and days, it could be any genre and even screamo if it portrays a message that has meaning to it.
2012-04-01 21:20:30
Critique from Sarcastic(note to self)
Written by: Sarcastic
(Critique on Blood Moon Tide)
I thought it was interesting, but it definitely needs some work. (: I don't claim to be a fantastic writer or anything like that, but here are just a few things I noticed while reading it
Check the use of '""'
Watch the switching of active and passive verbs (you want active, but you sometimes switch back and forth
Sloooowwww down the plot, when you throw big ideas at the reader you want to linger on it to get the full effect.
Watch for the repition of words, aka try not to use the same word twice within 2-3 sentances.
More detail about landscape.
Clarify WHO the character is and WHAT they are (I thought it was a human at first)
Story within the story should be a little bit more broken up (smaller segments with more movement from the story teller)
Remember that the reader gets their clues on how to react from the main character, so since the main character/the character retelling the story are very factual about it, the reader will accept it as fact and therefore there will be less of an emotional impact, and some lines of pure emotion that are thrown in there might seem off, awkward or cheesy.
(: In all I think it was pretty good, I tend to be a harsh editor, so Im sorry if any of this offends you, if you want me to go through something with you, or show you want I mean/ work through some of this stuff with you then let me know.
Her comment to my blog: Haha, I didn't realize you blogged this. -is amused- ^^ If you want me to read over it again, just let me know (:
2012-04-02 22:15:56
A Thank You Note From Kiba
Written by: Kiba
Dear Rare(aka Miya),
To my dearest friend I have on this sie right now. You have helped me in so many ways, you wouldn't believe it. When I first met you on here You were 17 I was 14. But we shared the same dream almost, and I could trust with my life. Who would of thought someone I never met a day in my life, saved my life, and turned it around. When I told people I wanted to be a poet one day they doughted me, everyone one but you! You have helped me so much, I think of you as a really good friend.
Love You bestie Kiba :)
Caring for a pet who is hurt/sick....
2012/04/08
(This was response to an arguement that went on via forums on PB...it was regarding Silver Streak's cat Silky, and I back her up 100%)
I agree with ELT and Folly. Folly and Silver have both been my long time friends, I had a similar situation with our maltese who we found out had cancer(over the phone with a vet) a few years back, we could not take her the night of notice...we waited till morning and she would barely move:(
We wound up having her put down, it tore my WHOLE family apart...
I understand caring for a pet, but not being able to do ANYTHING about it...I've been there...
Silver, message me if you need me:)
My prayers go out to your family, you and Silky....
Love you!!
2012-03-30 07:22:07
Random Piece
Written/Owned by: Miya
...And she sits here, a handful of hair tightly grasped in her hand as tears puddle in her eyes and fall to the ground. A sense of life has been stirred and she is reminded by everything in life who helped her get this far. Her tears are of joy and pain from her past. She weeps not of sadness, for she is finally on the right track in life. She may have a long road ahead of her filled with pain and trouble, but she knows she has support every step of the way and refuses to back down.
(This is just the way I feel day to day.)
2012-03-28 20:12:56
Critique From Coyotelk(note to improve)
Written by: Coyotelk
Okkoi.
So what I noticed was an immature style of writing. By this I mean simple verbs and language, repeating words, mixed tenses, and a switch between 1st ( I ) and 3rd (He/She/It) writing. I found a great deal of runs ons and comma splices, as well as some redundancy. When you write, make sure you look back to see if you’ve used a word more than once in a sentence (excluding simple words such as ‘a’.)
Watch out for those run ons, they seem to be a weakness? For example, part of the last sentence “she stated as she tucked it away once again and the two headed inside to begin their search for the key which would open the spell book.” is a run on. It should be something like (Changing wording a little to help fit) “ she stated as she tucked it away once again { and the two headed inside } **. She took a breath in as they set out to begin their search for the key that would open the spell book. “ Adding something like “ took a breath in “ helps with the mood, showing she may be overwhelmed//just starting on her journey. Now, for the asterisks. “ And the two headed inside” is awkwardly worded. I have to read it over a couple of times before I got it. It just doesn’t flow very well.
The last thing I’ll comment on is a couple grammatical errors, like its and it’s. It’s is, contrary to popular belief, not a possessive word. It’s is a contraction for ‘it is’. When talking about something like...a horse’s blanket, you use its. Example : “ The horse felt warm in its blanket. “
It took me awhile to get that down, since I always thought ‘it’s’ was possessive.
But critique aside, I do love the storyline! The plot is creative and the characters are unique. Keep on going with this, watch yourself improve!
Written on 4/30/12
(Anya is a long time writing friend...)
"I was impressed with how much your writing has grown up since I last read it."
This was in reply to her veiwing my website for the first time in a few years.
Bent to broken and back again
I am not afraid
Of Death, who's hair comes tumbling down
In a black cascade
Stretched to snapped and back again
My fears rest not in you
But far away from us and home
And all that I love, too.
Death cackles loud and cruel
Her voice harder than steel
And run away, I do not
For fear's not what I feel.
Death's eyes grow bigger as she nears
But I do not back away
And now, I think, It's me she fears.
I will not die today.
I stare at Death with her threatening eyes
And threaten her with my own
And pretty soon Death is gone
For I've turned her to stone.
Credits: Bethany DeWitt (aka Owl City, from Morgan.ponybox.com)
Story behind why she wrote it:
On this one, my parents said if I wanted a certain, amazing jumping horse, I had to sell my first pony, Bailey. Bailey is reaaallly old and can't be ridden anymore. I had to decide between my Bailey girl, or the new, fabulous jumper. I picked Bailey. A "friend" of mine bought the jumper instead. The jumper ended up having problems, so I wrote this poem.
Two roads,
So much to lose.
A rose on each,
Which will i choose?
Like the rest of the path,
On the left the rose is dead.
But on the right it's all alive
And the rose a startling red.
Frightened by the colors,
I quickly turn away
And I go down the path that's dead
Taking in the sad decay.
As I near the end i see a light
Shining through the trees.
I follow it, warm and bright,
Against the dying leaves.
Though i am scratched
By briars and thorns,
It's only my skin
And my clothes that are torn.
I reach a meadow
And sigh at the sight,
I'm glad i went left
Instead of going right.
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Credits: Bethany DeWitt
Stop and stare
You do not know
The burden she bears
So please just go
Let her cry
Let her fall apart
She won't be shy
About her broken heart
She's too far gone
So please let her be
Just let her drown
In her own misery
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Iran Conta Affair OF 1980's - Written By: Kylee T (aka: Hollywood Establos, from Morgan.ponybox.com)
November 1986, the Iran Contra Scandal came to light. Colonel North, Rear Adm. John M. Poindexter as well as two arm dealer’s where convicted and found guilty of defrauding the United States Of America by selling weapons to Iran and then funneling the money to Nicaraguan rebels. Reagan, who testified at the trial told The New York Times, ''I just have to believe that they're going to be found innocent because I don't think they were guilty of any lawbreaking or any crime’’ (Julie Johnson,” Reagan Asserts Iran-Contra Defendants Are Not Guilty”) However the underlying cause seemed to be the fact that congress no longer wished to continue funding with valid reasons yet Reagan and those involved in the scandals thought it wrong to turn down support. Although some things seemed to not be clear as to whether or not Reagan was involved with what some call the biggest scandal since Water Gate.
Economically this was a big deal, both for the United States and Nicaragua. With congress ending funding it can cause a major affect on trading among other things. This is not just because it was a possibility to ruin relationships but also because there was a question of how the money was being spent and if we continued to support the contras. According to Gates, “The Contras, even with American Support, cannot overthrow the Sandinista regime.” (“Nicaragua”, Robert M. Gates) However, in several paragraphs after he then contradicts himself, “Failure of the United States to provide further assistance to the resistance and collapse of the contra movement...thereby reversing the progress made in recent months.” Amb. Kirkpatrick believed that “If we don't find the money to support the contras, it will be perceived in the region and world as our having abandoned them.”(“National Security Planning Group Meeting”) That comment holds some truth. If we didn’t find the money with the economy then politically we would be seen as those who abandon others in a time of need.
We already have a poor relation with Cuba; however it seemed if we left Nicaragua now we would have a second Cuba. Gates refers to a quote by George Santayana, “Those who forget the past are condemned to repeat it.” According to gates, “In 1958-60 we thought that we could reach some sort of accommodation with Castro that would encourage him to build a pluralistic government in Cuba. We have been doing the same thing with the Nicaraguans, with the same success.” Now, anyone who ever cared to pay attention would know that the U.S. tried to help Cuba and to help stop communism and now Americans are no longer allowed in the country. When you look closely it seems to be all too familiar. I think that in Congress eyes they were afraid to repeat the past. Cuba was a threat because of the ability to shoot missiles at us at a close ranger, now look at the location of Nicaragua, just as big a threat from a few hundred more miles. The position with Central America, the western hemisphere, which has a major impact on the U.S., could have been majorly affected by a takeover of Central America.
If you look at the political aspect, there is no winning. If we used air strikes to remove military forces we would only be showing the world that the U.S. did not wish to neither invade nor help the cause. “Unless the acceleration of adverse military, political and economic developments is reversed, the Khomeini regime will face serious inability. This condition will sap officials energies and government resources...” (National Security Decision Directive) In a way, it is possible to understand why those involved would want to go around congress in a fear of the domino affect. If one country falls then the next one does and so on.
While today we do not have government officials defying congress and funneling money to the contras there is still conflict in the Middle East, a war some fear loosing . It is this fear that pushed us forward to become involved when terrorists hijacked several planes and crashed them into the twin towers. This fear has put us into an ongoing war that started in the 90’s and is in the light more than ever. As we fought the war against communism we now fight the war on terrorism. Just as when the soviet union collapsed, it was a huge victory for the U.S. when Osama Bin Ladin was taken out on operation Neptune Spear. While it could be said that the lesson learned is to never make a deal with the enemy, I believe we learned that when we sided with the Afghans to fight the soviets. The CIA began operation Cyclone including Osama Bin Ladin. Fast forward to ten years ago and we are in a war against them. Turns out it was like making a deal with the devil just like it was for those involved in the Iran Contra Scandal.
Resources used:
Times, Julie Johnson, Special To The New York. "Reagan Asserts Iran-Contra Defendants Are Not Guilty." The New York Times. 26 Mar. 1988. The New York Times. 18 May 2012 .
United States. White House. National Security. National Security Decision Directive. K. Johnson, 1988. Print.
United States. CIA. Director/Deputy. Nicaragua. By Robert M. Gates. Robert M. Gates, 1984. Print.
United States. U.S. Goverment. White House. National Security Planning Group Meeting. By The President, Vice PResident, Dr. Fred Ikle, Amb. Joane J. Kirkpatrick, and Robert C. McRarlane. National Security Council, 1984. Print.
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Written and owned by Celia Nickelsen ~ Find her on: http://21gunsart.deviantart.com/
A Little Thing I've Learnt In Life
Now, this is coming from someone who rarely sees praise.
Every high exam result is not 'Well done, you got 90%' but 'Well what about the remaining 10%, you made too many careless mistakes.'
Everything I do, in my life, is criticised, wether I like it or not, by my family.
Everywhere you go, you will have your critics.
No matter what you do, you will never be the best, there will always be 'someone' better than you, even if that 'someone' is a made up image of perfection in the back of your mind.
That 'someone' is the person you have to try and aim to be better than.
I have lots of 'someones'.
Those 'someones' will always be there with me, reminding me that no matter if I am the best in the world at something, 'someone' will be better, and there is always room to improve on 'perfection'
A person who can see their 'someones' is someone I can admire.
A person who can see their 'someones' and accept that those 'someones' will always be there, and they will always have to outdo those 'someones' is a person I can look up to.
In life, you'll have personality clashes, you'll have haters. You'll have those who break your heart and those who's hearts you break.
You'll have 'someones', those people you want to be like, and sometimes they always seem to be better than you are.
Don't get jealous of those 'someones'.
Instead, put your head down and work harder.
When I ride, I ride with the aim to improve so I can show those 'someones' that they're wrong.
It hasn't happened yet, and my 'someones' in my head that are forever talking about how their leg is always on and their heels are always down and thumbs are always up will one day be shown through my determination that they're wrong.
You'll meet 'someones' everywhere you go in life.
Some you'll admire, some you won't.
The aim is never to be like those 'someones', but to be better than them.
It just might take a lot of time, patience and practice, and then maybe one day, you'll be a 'someone' to somebody.
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Comment from Madeirey -
From: Madeirey
From ID: 221939
Time Sent: 01Jun12 00:41 AM
Title: Hey There!
Hello! You have never heard of me but I saw you in the "Creative Writing" group so I snooped around on your profile. WOW! I absolutely love how you write so much. *is jealous* I am a large fan of writing. Although currently I am a bit stuck in one. It is quite horrible staring at the same word for a hour wondering what to put that isn't dull and lifeless...
From: Madeirey
From ID: 221939
Time Sent: 02Jun12 14:48 PM
Title: Sadness
I love how you put so much emotion your writing. It seems so REAL and allows the reader to know how you are feeling inside... If that is happy, sad, or anything really. A powerful tool, that is.
(I told her I had a new record of: 36 veiws on my site, here's her response...)
From: Madeirey
From ID: 221939
Time Sent: 04Jun12 00:51 AM
Title: :D
That's awesome!! Half of them might have been me... I have been stalking. xD LOL! Love the Sword Wars story... I'm addicted. xD
Comment from Tearlily-
From: TearLily
From ID: 52359
Time Sent: 07Jun12 01:49 AM
Title: Hi
Hi there I was reading your home page and that's so neat. Isn't the show that you watched that gave you the hologram idea a Disney movie about that one chick who sings and dances and such?
Comment from Pony Meadows-
From: Pony Meadows
From ID: 37448
Time Sent: 03Jul12 23:46 PM
Title: Hey
I was wondering if you would want to do a message RP with me?
And BTW - I can't WAIT to read more of Flight of a New Era!! I started reading it before when you posted it on the forums and I was so upset when I found out you were only going to write it in October, but now that you're starting in August i'm so excited! You're such a great write. And to be honest I normally don't like your genre of writing, but when it's written by you it's AMAZING!!
Don't Erase Me ~ Written By: Miya/Eurlo/Brandy on 10/03/2012
Erase my past...
Erase my troubles...
But please don't consider me trash...
I am starting new...
Starting fresh...
So please let these thoughts brew...
I'm not her...
'Cause this is me
She was a trouble maker...
Unlike her, I won't make a big scene...
Nor will I annoy people like she did...
So please don't let me feel like I'm unseen...
You can erase my past...
But please don't erase me...
My thank you to Vocaloid ~ Written On 8/31/12 By: Miya/Eurlo/Brandy
I would like to PERSONALLY THANK Vocaloid, because they inspired a now favorite story of mine I'm writing called: Life Projections...about a holographic teen living a normal teenage life.
This anniversary has me in tears over pure happiness, WITHOUT you Life Projection would never be written...
SO THANKS from the bottom of my heart!!
XOXOXOXO
We are strong, you just have to believe despite what everyone says ~ Written On 8/29/12 By: Miya/Eurlo/Brandy
Who said you’re weak?
Who said you’re ugly?
Who said you’re fat?
I say you’re a STRONG individual!!
I say you’re a BEAUTIFUL person!!
I say you are whatever you believe you WANT TO BE!!
Don’t take their crap!!
Smack it all on a wall and tape it there, leave it there to remind you, THAT YOU CAN BE THE OPPOSITE OF IT ALL!!
Then smile at the progress you have made, because it takes GUTS to STAND STRONG IN THE FACE OF EVIL!!
Turn me down, I don't care... ~ Written On 8/23/12 By: Miya/Eurlo/Brandy
Turn me down, I don't care...
Leave me here scarred and fighting for air...
Make-up running from my eyes, as I look to the skies...
If you leave me, I'll be fine...
I'll be left crying, but I will still shine...
You can not bring me down...
So leave me...
Turn me down, I don't care...
I will stand again soon...
Just as I'm illuminated every night by the moon...
Warmth To My Heart ~ Written On 7/5/12 By: Miya/Eurlo/Brandy
Writing and watching the story come to life in my very own mind. As my fingers pound away at the keys before them. That pleasurable clicking noise they make as sentences are then turned to paragraphs and soon a whole story. I can't quite describe the feeling...it's like a flame being lit within my heart, the warmth it brings can not even be bested by a fire from my own living room fireplace...This is the THRILLS and SATISFACTION of a writer's job!! THIS SENSE OF LIFE WE AS WRITERS CREATE!!
Self Torture ~ Written on 7/6/12 By: Miya/Eurlo/Brandy
Why do we FALL for someone, then when they're gone we SEEK OUT songs and poems that REMIND US of that person? Why when we are already MOURNING the lost relationship do we CAUSE ourselves MORE PAIN? Is it so we GROW stiff to the PAIN? OR maybe to be TORN APART worse so that we may HEAL ourselves? I know the pain, the feeling of loneliness...
Self Torture may be so we learn to cope and maybe we will be stronger next time...No one knows for sure, but maybe that's a bit of comfort to those who ask, "Why?" STAY STRONG, being strong is not NEVER crying, but to heal and learn from those tears...
Blasting Away The Tears ~ Written on 7/6/12 By: Miya/Eurlo/Brandy
You turn up that one song he gave you and you fall against the wall and sink to the floor in tears, makeup running, your face is now streaked with blackness...You cry so hard, you think the music will drown you out...but all it's doing is drowning you in more pain and sarrow...You miss him and think about all those things you did together, the late nights, movies, sneeking around the house...The smiles and laughter...But now it's all gone and you can't help but remember it all so vividly...You sit there wondering if he's doing the same or hanging with his friends as if none of it ever happened...You try so hard to blast the tears away and fall asleep in the floor with teary stained eyes...
LOVE YOURSELF and friends should support you - Written on 5/6/12 by: Miya
We Are All UNIQUE!!
I love writing and RPGing...I spend 70+ of my day online and my family hates it...BUT I LOVE WHAT I DO!! I write and RPG. If I'm writing anythng ber it a random muse, RPG plot for me and a partner, story or a book...I AM HAPPY!! I WOULD DIE if anything happened to my laptop...Just the other day my laptop had a glitch and said reinstall Work word proccessor..I flipped out...shut it down and restarted my laptop...and it worked just fine and everything was still there(thank god) I then prceeded to CRY...I was so scared and relieved!! DON'T hate me cause I'm a internet junkie...support me, cuase it's where my dreams are at...
Leaving your past behind - Written on 4/9/12 by: Miya
I close my eyes for the night and in th morning light, I shall have no fear, nor shall I weep a tear.
My past is behind me and my future ahead, the girl I once was is now dead...No longer do I live scared, for I have friends who had an ear to spare.
I am moving on, for the path of God has been shone...
Accomplishment - Written 4/12/12 by: Miya
A tear falls slowly to the ground as she is overwelmed with joy. She is leaving a site she joined for friends years ago, and now she wants to chase her dreams as a writer. So many memories and friends are here...joy and sadness mix inside her. She finally has decided to chase that dream one step closer and become a full time writer.
Haters and misery tied into one -
I was alone,sure i would make trouble to get attention...
Did any of you think of why I was doing it? No...
Did any of you ask? No...
Therefore none of you even cared, you would all be rude, down right hateful, inside my soul was already so weak adn you would all tear it to even smaller pieces...
I was so alone, so weak, being tore down with each bit of hope I seemed to gain....
I grew to hate alot of you, and fearing you as well, but no longer, do I fear you, I dare you to do it again... you will not like my reply.... that weak child is gone, never to return...
So go be mean, but if I find out about anyone doing it to someone else I know or don't, you will hear a few things from me...
Concerning Self Esteem-
Well you are unique, and you have to believe you are regardless of what people say:( I thought I was ugly, but came to terms beauty isn't everything) That's my way of looking at it, I am me, I love to write, I'm smart, got my GED(general education Diploma)...
So I don't really care, I'll try my best to look good, but not going out of my way to impress anyone, because as my quot concerning beauty goes, "Beauty isn't everything, heart and soul is." Meaning if you believe you are, that's all that matters and a great personality helps.
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...And she sits here, a handful of hair tightly grasped in her hand as tears puddle in her eyes and fall to the ground. A sense of life has been stirred and she is reminded by everything in life who helped her get this far. Her tears are of joy and pain from her past. She weeps not of sadness, for she is finally on the right track in life. She may have a long road ahead of her filled with pain and trouble, but she knows she has support every step of the way and refuses to back down.
(This is just the way I feel day to day.)
A Writer that cries out to be an Artist as well-
She sees all the beautiful creations made and tries/fails everytime to make something. Yet comes out with nothing. Her heart cries, for it wants that talent so bad. But it's just out of reach, and though she holds her arm out for it, it only gets further away.
The pain of a writer is that she can never give her characters the life they are always asking her for.
There's an editor in every person-
(With the proper credits to the quotes I used in the passage below. I do not claim the quotes!!)
They say every person judges his/herself in everything he/she does. This is very true for all writers, we are probably some of the worst. We are scared to write new things do to lack of experience or knowledge. But once we do our writing skill increases and we become more potent writers. No writer can ever stop improving, rather it be grammar, spelling, genre exploring, different perspectives on the story at hand, or just writing in general.
We all have an inner editor in us, some of us use it, while others see no need in it. Wise words I once heard, "Never stop trying to improve." That and the saying, "Never give up on something that you can't go a day without thinking about." by - Unknown. both mean alot to be and I often look at them when I feel down with my writing. Or my newest favorite quote, "Keep on going, and the chances are that you will stumble on something, perhaps when you are least expecting it. I never heard of anyone ever stumbling on something sitting down." by - Charles F. Kettering. My point is to never give up if you love writing, ALL writer's struggle just like you are now! which brings me to yet another great quote, "Nothing in this world can take the place of persistence. Talent will not nothing is more common than unsuccessful people with talent. Genius will not unrewarded genius is almost a proverb. Education will not the world is full of educated derelicts. Persistence and determination alone are omnipotent. The slogan 'press on' has solved and always will solve the problems of the human race." by - Calvin Coolidge
When I had lost everything, even my Faith... - Written by: Miya/Eurlo on Friday, March 30, 2012 at 1:00pm
A few years ago I plunged into the dark hole of seclusion, I became depressed, thought no one cared about me. I had of course prayed several times for help. They seem to go unanswered...many nights would I cry myself to sleep, the pain of my depression cuased me to lose my Faith. I soon begun to think suicidal thoughts, even put knives to my wrist and ropes around my neck....I knew what I was dong would solve nothing. I would put them away and go cry till my pillow became soaked with tears, sometimes even falling alseep. I went many years fearing people and the outside world, fearing what judgement they would bring. I went downhill, death wishes became a daily thing. Years later I discovered online friends that I fit in with a few I still have 3-4 years later. I found love, only to lose it to arguements between the two of us. The relationship seemed to have wake me up to the world. I have now beat depression back in november of 2011, and finished my first short story, I have lost weight, I feel alive!! I am currently searching for a jobb and trying to fit into the world once again! My Faith has been restored, life rediscovered, acommplishments made....
All thanks to one guy which seems to have COMPLETELY turned my life around. So to him I say for the millionth time, THANK YOU!
Depression, after effects and Love ~ Written By: Miya/Eurlo on Saturday, December 31, 2011 at 12:28am
Depression took me over at such a young age, my life slowly fell apart, I gave up making friends and never talked to any guy for the whole time I was depressed....
I started eating emotionally, I quickly gained weight...
I quit taking care of myself, let myself go...
I lost my self esteem like a flame to a candle being blown out...
I was done for, I quit caring if I lived, because the pain was so deep, death seemed like a good answer....
I often tried to kill myself, grabbing nives and holding them at my wrist, grabing belts looking up at th ceiling above me.... wanting to beat my head till I bled to death
I often hit myself till I bruised myself, didn't ever care if I got a cut or wounded...I would sit there and marvel at the blood coming out often trying to make it bleed more by picking at it so it wouldn't clot...
If it were not for my friends, I would have cut my wrist, or ended up hanging from the ceiling.... I am cover in scars from my picking habit.....
I am mentally scarred as well, I still have self esteem issues, still fat, but I have beaten depression, yet the results of it still lingers....
It will take alot of kind words and a loving heart to mend me completly, because I am still suffering the after effects....
So love me with all your being, speak kind words into my ear, love me for who I am, and not hate me for what I have become...
Only time will tell how much you really love me, because if you truely love me...
You will love me regardless of my looks, you would not be afraid to be seen with me around your friends, you would not ever leave me for a prettier girl, who has a skinnnier look and prettier face....
To me that is true love, that is what love is all about....
So tell me do you have what it takes to mend a broken soul? Could you love me for who I am right now, would I have to change to suit your taste in a girl?
Don't leave me in the dark, because to me, you are my light, I have began my healing thanks to you, I'm hoping you'll be the one to heal me completely....
Living in two worlds -
Just a year ago I lived in one world.
The next year came around and then all of a sudden I lived in two.
Both worlds had trees,grass.
Both had animals.
Only one had magic....
Only one had wolves....
Only one, I imagined....
I made my way in both worlds....
I made mistakes in both worlds....
I made only one up....
How did I walk it in both worlds at the same time?
How did I imagine only one?
Here's how:
I lived in one and the other I also lived in.
Only one I lived in a made up world....
So that is how I live in two worlds!
Can you guess what my other world is?
Knight in shining armor(to a dear friend of mine) -
Since you met me here you have made my life change for the best.
I have noticed I'm not as depressed, I'm not alone, there is someone out there who I get along great with...
Since you've been around life has been a blast, I haven't laughed this much in a long time with someone....
I seem to not be as weak any more, for you have strengthed my heart and mind once again...
I couldn't have met a better person than you, always know...YOU changed my life, YOU made me happy, YOU made me strong again...
No one else I have met here has made me that way, even though they are great YOU are my knight in shining armor...
So to the person who saved me from sure destruction, I give him my gratitude...
THANK YOU, for all you have done to me you are my everything:)
maybe know things will be cleared of the thick fog which surronds me and I will finally see, whati have been missing for all these years...
~Love Miya, the soul that was lost has been found again....
Knight in shining armor (message to a friend I respect) -
You are a geat person, a even better friend, an amazing Father.
You know how to treat people with respect and care, you know when to listen and when to shut your mouth...
You can be a goof and yet I have seen the more serious side of you as well...
I feel like without you life is like a puzzle, where YOUR the missing piece...
I like to chat for hours with you, and make you laugh....
I like that you can make me laugh and even on my worst days I can not get mad at you, it's impossible...
We are so close I feel as if I have known you a lifetime...
We work great as a support team and we are there for one another when we need a should to cry on(not literally in this case) or a ear for listening...
We are basically like links on a chain, forever togther ...
Love is irresistable(message to my dear friend) -
I feel like I'm torn to a million pieces, you have opened my heart and now I feel the heartache when your gone...
I love you so much that all I can think about is you, day and night....
I spend days daydreaming and nights crying....
I want to be with you sooo bad the pain has become unbearable....
I have had breakdowns since we met....
My heart begins to race and it feels as if it will explode, the blood rushing through my body, I begin to tremble....
I Wish you was here just to hold me, I owe alot to you for giving me that final push out of depression, and now I don't wanna lose you!!
I love you so much more than just you being a hero...
I don't know if you feel the same way but my heart aches for YOU....
Seeing Life differently (message to my dear friend) -
Rather we see life in black and white or we see it in color, life is the same either way...
Maybe the fun is taken out of seeing the worlds colors, but it is not needed to live a normal life...
It isn't only about what we see, it's about what we feel, we taste, we hear...
There are people all over the world born without sight yet some are born like you with site but it's screwed up, those who put you down because of it are nothing but rude, mean people who like the feeling of others pain, do I judge you? No, and I never will, if anything you have a gift some of us wished we had, some of us wonder what life would be like to see things in a different way, but true none of us would want to be that way forever, no one wants less than they have, but everyone wants more...
I wished I could help you, but we are who god made us to be, and the saying goes, "There's someone out there for everyone to love." maybe you have finally found yours...
we are all special in our own ways...
NEW CONTENT AS OF: 6/3/12 @ 2PM
2012-03-30 08:51:52
Songs That Have Meaning...
Written by: Miya
Why do you listen to songs?
Perhaps because it was recommended by a friend?
Maybe you listen to it because everyone else does?
Or maybe due to religous beliefs?
Well I listen to music for what MEANING a song has in the lyrics.
I find a song is better and inspires if it has a message it is trying to get out to the world. It is the way I search for songs now and days, it could be any genre and even screamo if it portrays a message that has meaning to it.
2012-04-01 21:20:30
Critique from Sarcastic(note to self)
Written by: Sarcastic
(Critique on Blood Moon Tide)
I thought it was interesting, but it definitely needs some work. (: I don't claim to be a fantastic writer or anything like that, but here are just a few things I noticed while reading it
Check the use of '""'
Watch the switching of active and passive verbs (you want active, but you sometimes switch back and forth
Sloooowwww down the plot, when you throw big ideas at the reader you want to linger on it to get the full effect.
Watch for the repition of words, aka try not to use the same word twice within 2-3 sentances.
More detail about landscape.
Clarify WHO the character is and WHAT they are (I thought it was a human at first)
Story within the story should be a little bit more broken up (smaller segments with more movement from the story teller)
Remember that the reader gets their clues on how to react from the main character, so since the main character/the character retelling the story are very factual about it, the reader will accept it as fact and therefore there will be less of an emotional impact, and some lines of pure emotion that are thrown in there might seem off, awkward or cheesy.
(: In all I think it was pretty good, I tend to be a harsh editor, so Im sorry if any of this offends you, if you want me to go through something with you, or show you want I mean/ work through some of this stuff with you then let me know.
Her comment to my blog: Haha, I didn't realize you blogged this. -is amused- ^^ If you want me to read over it again, just let me know (:
2012-04-02 22:15:56
A Thank You Note From Kiba
Written by: Kiba
Dear Rare(aka Miya),
To my dearest friend I have on this sie right now. You have helped me in so many ways, you wouldn't believe it. When I first met you on here You were 17 I was 14. But we shared the same dream almost, and I could trust with my life. Who would of thought someone I never met a day in my life, saved my life, and turned it around. When I told people I wanted to be a poet one day they doughted me, everyone one but you! You have helped me so much, I think of you as a really good friend.
Love You bestie Kiba :)
Caring for a pet who is hurt/sick....
2012/04/08
(This was response to an arguement that went on via forums on PB...it was regarding Silver Streak's cat Silky, and I back her up 100%)
I agree with ELT and Folly. Folly and Silver have both been my long time friends, I had a similar situation with our maltese who we found out had cancer(over the phone with a vet) a few years back, we could not take her the night of notice...we waited till morning and she would barely move:(
We wound up having her put down, it tore my WHOLE family apart...
I understand caring for a pet, but not being able to do ANYTHING about it...I've been there...
Silver, message me if you need me:)
My prayers go out to your family, you and Silky....
Love you!!
2012-03-30 07:22:07
Random Piece
Written/Owned by: Miya
...And she sits here, a handful of hair tightly grasped in her hand as tears puddle in her eyes and fall to the ground. A sense of life has been stirred and she is reminded by everything in life who helped her get this far. Her tears are of joy and pain from her past. She weeps not of sadness, for she is finally on the right track in life. She may have a long road ahead of her filled with pain and trouble, but she knows she has support every step of the way and refuses to back down.
(This is just the way I feel day to day.)
2012-03-28 20:12:56
Critique From Coyotelk(note to improve)
Written by: Coyotelk
Okkoi.
So what I noticed was an immature style of writing. By this I mean simple verbs and language, repeating words, mixed tenses, and a switch between 1st ( I ) and 3rd (He/She/It) writing. I found a great deal of runs ons and comma splices, as well as some redundancy. When you write, make sure you look back to see if you’ve used a word more than once in a sentence (excluding simple words such as ‘a’.)
Watch out for those run ons, they seem to be a weakness? For example, part of the last sentence “she stated as she tucked it away once again and the two headed inside to begin their search for the key which would open the spell book.” is a run on. It should be something like (Changing wording a little to help fit) “ she stated as she tucked it away once again { and the two headed inside } **. She took a breath in as they set out to begin their search for the key that would open the spell book. “ Adding something like “ took a breath in “ helps with the mood, showing she may be overwhelmed//just starting on her journey. Now, for the asterisks. “ And the two headed inside” is awkwardly worded. I have to read it over a couple of times before I got it. It just doesn’t flow very well.
The last thing I’ll comment on is a couple grammatical errors, like its and it’s. It’s is, contrary to popular belief, not a possessive word. It’s is a contraction for ‘it is’. When talking about something like...a horse’s blanket, you use its. Example : “ The horse felt warm in its blanket. “
It took me awhile to get that down, since I always thought ‘it’s’ was possessive.
But critique aside, I do love the storyline! The plot is creative and the characters are unique. Keep on going with this, watch yourself improve!
Written on 4/30/12
(Anya is a long time writing friend...)
"I was impressed with how much your writing has grown up since I last read it."
This was in reply to her veiwing my website for the first time in a few years.